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RE: Dejando el nido y llorando por dentro

Dear friend,

Hereby some tips

If you go to the community site you see all the posts listed. Here we see the title, picture and the first sentences. Those 3 aspects are important to be noticed.

Title: catches the attention
Text: great. You combined your topic in a creative way with the pictures.

What I miss is describing the picture in a simple way like: I see the sun, clouds the sky is red...

Your first sentence is important after your title and picture what I read is this

Saludos amigos!👋🏻
Espero que se encuentren muy bien, y que estén pasando un hermoso día. En encuentro aquí ya que les voy a estar compartiendo mi escrito. Espero que les guste mucho mi escrito que la verdad disfrute mucho en hacerlo para ustedes.

After I read the title I expect something else to read instead of "saludos amigos..." try to attract the attention with your first sentences so the reader is willing to read on and will not skip parts of the text or leave because you wrote exactly the same as many others.

Your overall presentation is good but it misses the most important step asked in Task 1 which is to name what you see in simple words without assumptions and to tell what you feel (in Lesson 1 feelings are listed because of that reason).

You will find the report in the comment section.
Thank you for joining us. I wish you a great day and till the next task.